@Begin
@Participants:	JPN003
@Age:	20
@Sex:	M
@YearInSchool:	U1
@Major:	?
@StudyHistory:	8
@OtherLanguage:	German=0.6;none=
@Qualification:	STEP=2(2003);none=;none=
@Abroad:	none=;none=
@Reading:	2
@Writing:	2
@Listening:	2
@Speaking:	2
@JapaneseEssay:	1
@EnglishEssay:	1
@Difficulty:	5
@Topic:	crime
@TWE:	2;3;2.5
@Comments:	
@Coder:	2005-12-21 DataInputBy SAKAUE Tatsuya;
@Version:	2.0
*JPN003:	Why we have heard more criminal news these days than ever?
%NTV:	Why do we hear more criminal news now than ever?
%COM:	
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*JPN003:	We could have lived hearing very little criminal news here in Japan.
%NTV:	We used to hear very little criminal news here in Japan.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	And we really have had little crime.
%NTV:	We really did have little crime.
%COM:	I recommend joining the above two sentences with "and."
*JPN003:	We had been proud of this great custom for a long time.
%NTV:	We were proud of this safe environment for a long time.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	Someone said that it was the reason why we had so little crime that we Japanese had a special manner whose name was 'Bushido'.
%NTV:	Someone said that the reason we had so little crime was that we Japanese had a special manner called 'Bushido'.
%COM:	Do you mean "someone said," as in a specific person, or do you mean "some people said"?
*JPN003:	eBushido' is the way of ancient Japanese knights' who are called 'Bushi'.
%NTV:	Bushido is the way of ancient Japanese knights, who are called 'Bushi'.
%COM:	
%par:
*JPN003:	But, we hear much sad criminal news these days.
%NTV:	These days, however, we hear much sad criminal news.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	Certainly, we have more sad crime than we have had ever.
%NTV:	We have more sad crime now than we have ever had.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	And recent crime is different from previous crime.
%NTV:	Moreover, recent crime is different from the crime we have had before.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	For example, we often have crime taken by teenagers these days.
%NTV:	For example, crimes are often committed by teenagers.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	Five or six years ago, we were surprised at the criminal news that a boy (who was an elementally school student then) had been killed and only his head had been put on the gate of an elementally school.
%NTV:	Five or six years ago, we were shocked at the criminal news that a boy who was in elementary school had been killed and his head had been [severed and?] put on the gate of his school.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	And we were much more surprised at the news that it was junior high school student who had killed him.
%NTV:	We were even more shocked to hear that it was a junior high school student who had killed him.
%COM:	A junior high school student? Junior high school students? I'm not sure if you mean one or more than one here.
%par:
*JPN003:	Then the reason why we hear much sad criminal news these days is the increase of the crime taken by teenagers?
%NTV:	Is the reason we hear so much sad criminal news these days the increase of crimes committed by teenagers?
%COM:	
*JPN003:	This is true.
%NTV:	OK
%COM:	If you are going to provide a conflicting perspective next, you might want to say "That may be true" instead of "This is true."
*JPN003:	But we must think why such crime has increased these days.
%NTV:	However, we must think why such crime has increased.
%COM:	
*JPN003:	I think
%NTV:	NU
%COM:	This seems to have been cut off. You'll have to finish your thoughts here.
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